posted 12-29-2000 10:34 PM
Write it as a short story and sell it to an anthology magazine that publishes that kind of thing. Not everything can be a script. Honestly, that's my best answer, some stories are gonna be what their gonna be.My second best answer, well. Is there anything the charachters talk about that can be better shown? (Or a mix of action shown with overlapping explainational dialogue /monologue.) Can a flashback take the place of an explination? Could the prologue of your story be the real story?
Example-wrong :(Movie starts text rolls up) In the year of our lord 1242 an great tragedy struck the surrounding country from the mountains in the east.....
Example right: (Shot of sun rising over mountains a great and terrible noise is heard in the distance) (Cut to closeup of... ECT.ECT.ECT ...action ...action ...action ....Scene ends fade out) ("ten years later" printed on screen)
Maybe the talking takes you fronm point A to point B too fastand you need a twist. Unexpected disaster, tragedy or intervention from a third party is always good and expands the story setting.
If you want to go cheap you could have some sort of tack on story like the inept assassin trying to find the hero but just missing him by chance.
Specifics, of course, could help.
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[This message has been edited by Skinned Fox (edited 12-29-2000).]
posted 12-29-2000 06:14 PM