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Topic: My movie idea.....please read
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RussTDawg
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posted 01-20-2001 01:15 AM
I've been brainstorming a lot lately as to what sorta movie a wannabe indy filmmaker like myself could sponsor, or come up with...and I decided to deviate from fantasy and special FX, and maybe concentrate on something that actually does exist today, and that although it goes on all the time and everywhere, people are unnaware of it...I decided to delve into the subject of the underworld of drugs, crime, and stuff in America. And I think I have a sorta good start to an "idea" that might actually have a future.I've written up a rough draft of the introduction to the movie...it's not in a good format at all, and it's hardly a screenplay or script, but it gives an idea of what's happening. I haven't decided on a name for the movie yet, but I'd appreciate it if everyone read my little intro scene and tell me if I have a good idea going....
http://visual-stimulus.cherrytaco.com/intro.html u can view it by going there....thanks, and all comments are appreciated. |
DigiteyeZ
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posted 01-20-2001 01:56 AM
nice opening scene, RussTDawg. i can envision what it looks like in my head so i think you have something going there. kinda like a LaFemmeNikita scene. maybe just show a brief establishing scene, with the officers pulling up in cars to the complex or whatever, don't just start inside the building. show them entering the building.let me guess what comes next: Jay shoots Kain and blows up the building, after snagging a briefcase from one of his own men. kinda predictable, though. i'm curious as to what your story is. you mentioned drugs, so i guess this was a drug bust gone bad? and Jay fouled it up on purpose because he has connections to the guy they were busting? there's a lot of different ways you could send this. sounds like a good, fast-paced opening scene to catch people's attention. the kind of thing you would see in a theatrical film. good work writing, keep us posted about the rest of the plot... |
RussTDawg
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posted 01-20-2001 02:02 AM
Ok...first off, thanks a lot....i'm VERY impressed that I got a response in under a half hour from posting the topic =) And thanks for your compliments. Gives me some incentive to keep going! quote:
Sometimes you get an instant response, sometimes it takes a lot longer. (Patience is a virtue.  ) Welcome to LAS and the Maker Guild, hope you benefit from it and enjoy sharing your experiences with others. Jeff F
next...you were about half and half right...
i'm not gonna reveal much more about the story for two reasons...
1.) Lots is still undeveloped
2.) It'll take away the surprise in case I ever get it made =) But fyi, Jay isn't THAT bad...at least not yet...so no, he doesn't shoot Kain because doing so would make it obvious that he was a suspect...perhaps Kain and him are in on it together? dum dum dum! =P Next, you were right, it was a drug bust, and I think you're also right....but I'd like to keep the characters in the beginning as "unknowns" so maybe I'll just show a parked serveilance van outside or something, then cut to the hallway so you know what's going on. Looks like I have some brainstorming to do though....thanks again for the compliments though =) [This message has been edited by Jeff F (edited 01-20-2001).] |
Gamecat
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posted 01-20-2001 06:27 AM
Hey, not bad so far, but I'm kind of leary of any script about drugs... Maybe it's just me but there have just been a rush of them lately and I'm kinda tired of them... anyway... my only other suggestion is that if you plan to continue look into a book about proper script formatting. But then again you probably just wrote that up so we could get an idea so far so if so nevermind... It's just you wrote about possibly adding some special fx and what not, and thats not really supposed to be in the script.. Thats up to the director to decide... But since you're planning to direct it, I giuess you can add it if you want :-P |
RussTDawg
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posted 01-20-2001 01:16 PM
Yeah, I know what you're saying.
I just sorta wrote that up to get an idea of what I would do if I was gonna make it.If/when I write the script or screenplay I'll leave all that extra commentary out of course =)
Glad you like it so far, and I agree there has been sort of an outbreak of drug type movies lately, which is why i'm sorta weary of it as well. Not sure EXACTLY where this is gonna go.... |
E. Flask
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posted 01-21-2001 01:30 AM
Wow, that is a great beginning! I agree with Digiteyze that it is easy to envision. Such a scene is full of potential for atmosphere, terror, drama, etc. Imagine him going through something like that and then having to go home and play family man to the wife and kid! Drugs can kill your soul, but how well will you hold up if this is what you have to do to destroy the drugs?Anyway, I really liked it and I say run with it in any direction you want. "We become what we think about most of the time." -- Brian Tracy.
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RussTDawg
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posted 01-21-2001 01:35 AM
Well, I really appreciate all of your guys' support, and I'm glad you like the intro...unfortunately, there's more to a movie than an intro, and I've gone into a creativity slump since I wrote that, and I'm having some problems thinking up sub-plots and things to get people more involved in the story and background. I'm willing to consider your ideas on where this should go maybe...and who knows, maybe someone can help me out and can co-write the story and script with me?If anyone's interested and has a openly creative mind, please contact me, and we'll talk. ICQ: 63321169
AIM: Phr13dPh1sh thanks for your help |
RussTDawg
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posted 01-21-2001 09:43 PM
still waiting for someone to help me =PI don't wanna take on the task of writing the entire story on my own, and I think the story could be twice as intricate and involving if I had someone else to help me out with it, so that we could criticize and revise eachothers ideas. so pleeeeze, someone help me out |
DigiteyeZ
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posted 01-22-2001 04:50 AM
hey RussTDawg, i'm glad to help to the extent that i can. i don't usually have time to chat online but i can pass email back and forth. i have school finals this week and i'm working on a video presentation for my sister's wedding coming up in 3 weeks. so, i'm going to be really busy, but i don't sleep much so if you wanted to connect via email with ideas, i can give you feedback and possibly write out some scenes with you.are you planning on writing this as a 2-hour feature film? that would be a very complex project which would require more expertise than i have to offer. if this is something you think you might film and direct someday, could it be shorter? so check my profile and email me about what you want to do. |
DigiteyeZ
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posted 01-31-2001 11:31 PM
sorry if you or anyone tried to contact me, my email has not been receiving any mail for awhile. i've switched to a new address: cablemp@onebox.com | |
