Author Topic: In the Cards amittman
posted 01-20-2001 05:43 PM
I am adapting a short story into a short film called "In the cards". It is about an actor who is told he will die on saturday night and his psychological degredation while he waits till saturday night. IN the end, he dies on sunday while having sex with a girl whose tatoo says "Saturday Knight". Does anyone have any suggestions that may add more substance to the middle of the story???

multimedia light & magic
posted 01-20-2001 07:03 PM
hahah! i think thats quite funny actually
you oculd develop his superstitious side, maybe a visit to a fortuen teller, and maybe some dream sequence when his mind begins to break down.

sex on saturday knight
hahaha

Film_Scorer
posted 01-20-2001 07:32 PM
hahaha...that is the essence of irony.

I suppose an interesting twist to the story could be that Saturday is the guys birthday. either saturday or sunday...his friends could hire a hooker for him (the chick with the "Saturday Knight" tatoo).


As for the fourtune...I've seen psycic chatrooms (really lame by the way) but he could go into it to fool with the "psycic's" brains. This is modled after Hudini's unmasking of the fraudulant seance leaders (when he desquised himself with a mustache, and asked to contact his dead daughter. when the seance leaders finally got an uplink with his daughter, he would reveal his identity, and reveal he HAD no daughter...thus putting the seance leaders on the spot.)


He could have a couple friends over one night, and they go into a psycic chatroom masked as a female, and ask "How will things turn out for me and my boyfriend"...all the while joking and laughing. THe psycic could pick up a "vibe", and ask if they really wanted to know. they'd say "YES! Dammit!", and then she'd deliver the news that the guy is going to die on saturday night. this could spook them out momentarily, and cause them to exit the chatroom.

This would make for a good joke like "So, you wanna go grab a beer on saturday? I know they're always dead for you" or somthing.


hopefully I gave you some ideas. If I think of anymore, I'll let you know.

Sounds like it is going to make a great film

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nova_monkey
posted 01-20-2001 11:03 PM
Hey, that's not a bad title, amittman. I would try and stray away from the traditional idea of fortune tellers/clairvoyants, psychic phone lines etc. Maybe try something a little different.

The main character could, for some reason, have to walk through a pretty dodgy part of town. An old bum (think filmy cataract eyes, long filthy beard, robe-like clothing ) could stumble out of an alleyway and just eerily lock eyes with this guy.

After being told he will die on Saturday night, the main character could press for more information, but the bum just laughs and walks off, continuing to crazily yell out the prophecy until he disappears into the fog.

Maybe the strip joint where the main guy meets Gloria could be located in the neighbourhood... After he doesn't die on Saturday night, the guy could return to the street (on Sunday night) to try and find the old man again. Failing, he could wander into the club and then meet Gloria, leading to his death....

This is just a quick sugestion, but you could do it heaps of ways. I'll try and think of a few more.

nova_monkey

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amittman
posted 01-20-2001 11:35 PM
hey NOva, thanx for the great advice.....but how did you know that the name of the character was gloria??? Have you read the story before?? Or was it from my last post?? just curious...thanx again to you all!

millennia
posted 01-21-2001 04:24 AM
Wow, that's a genuinely interesting plot, I'd really like to see how it turns out. Anyways, just wondering if you're planning on making it into a comedy or drama

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amittman
posted 01-21-2001 11:51 AM
I was planning on making it a dramedy. I want it to be done dramtically and stylistically, but the end is supposed to be a joke, so I don't want drama to get in the way of that.

nova_monkey
posted 01-21-2001 08:14 PM
amittman: yeah, I just remembered the name from your other post about this.

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