Once Upon A Time...
Screen Writing Idea development Once Upon A Time...
Okay, I have written a story, and need to change it into a script, I know for most of it what I am doing, but I need some help on the so-called "Once Upon A Time" part... ...The situation that I want explained is as follows:
Once upon a time in the far cries of the Eastern boarders of France, there lay a town by the name of Frontaue. Now you will notice that Frontaue lies outside of the boundaries of France, and thus is its own nation, however due to its closeness, locals refer to the town simply as Frontaue, France. Such being said, it should be assumed that it would have its own kingdom and rulers, separate from that of France. And it nonetheless did. High above the residents of Frontaue, far atop the only mountain in the valley town, was their castle. It was of an odd structure for a castle, but no matter was it to the people for it served its purpose to house the royal family. Now the king of this cheery village, was a man by the name of Pierre Dufame’ and he ruled his people with a just and honest law.
Now it should not be assumed yet, that Frontaue was without troubles, for they were constantly at war with the neighboring Northmen tribe from the Lost Woods. Now some question why the tribe would want to attack such a peaceful and loving land, but the answer to that question lies in the stone heart of their leader, the Black Knight. Now it must be understood that this “Black knight” was none other than the king’s younger brother, Dante’ Dufame’. Angered by the fact that his brother ruled in Frontaue and not he, Dante’ took off to the Lost Woods to not be heard from for 17 years.
But now, he has returned. Returned with an army of Northmen, banded together only by their love of carnage, that he attacks Frontaue from the Lost Woods, trying to claim what he believes to be rightfully his.
His small army surely would have been defeated by now, had it not been for the fact that during one of his excursions in the woods, the Black Knight had stumbled across a sorceress of evil, Glorina, whom vowed to join his fight and added her power of rejuvenation, spreading it to his Northmen making them an impossible force to overcome.
Okay, any help would be great, Thanks.
Mark 
Have the evil lady turn on "BLACK NIGHT" (is that right) and the town is overun with demons and supernatrual beings and only one person knows here weakness and that is black night.
A TWIST
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Evan,
No, I have the story all figured out, it's just that I need the actual text for like what the narrator should say at the begining, and he needs to convey the info above like:
Narrator:
Once upon a time in a far away land... ...blah blah blah.
Anything I write for that sounds too corney (sp?)
Thanks,
Mark
Okay lemme think
(In Suspensful voice) Let me tell you a story (as an old man throws a type of smoke/dust) that happened long ago in the far cries of the Eastern borders of france, there lay a town by the name of Frontaue. Now you will notice that Frontaue lies outside of the boundaries of France, and thus is its own nation, however due to its closeness, locals refer to the town simply as Frontaue, France. Such being said, it should be assumed that it would have its own kingdom and rulers, separate from that of France. And it nonetheless did. High above the residents of Frontaue, far atop the only mountain in the valley, there was a castle. It was of an odd structured castle, but no matter was it to the people for it served its purpose to house the royal family of Frontaue, France. Now the king of this cheery village, was a man by the name of Pierre Dufame’ and he ruled his people with a just and honest law.
Now it should not be assumed yet, that Frontaue was without troubles, for they were constantly at war with the neighboring Northern-men tribe from the Lost Woods. Now some question why the tribe would want to attack such a peaceful and loving land, but the answer to that question lies in the stone heart of their leader, the Black Knight. Now it must be understood that this “Black knight” was none other than the king’s younger brother, Dante’ Dufame’. Angered by the fact that his brother ruled in Frontaue and not he, Dante’ took off to the Lost Woods to not be heard from for 17 years.
But now, he has returned in a dark rage with an army of Northern-men, banded together only by their love of carnage, that he attacks Frontaue from the Lost Woods, trying to claim what he believes to be rightfully his.
His small army surely would have been defeated by now, had it not been for the fact that during one of his excursions in the woods, the Black Knight had stumbled across a sorceress of evil, Glorina, whom vowed to join his fight and added her power of rejuvenation, spreading it to his Northern-men making them an impossible force to overcome.
Is this good?
Doh'! Good, but I forgot to mention something... ...I only want to introduce Frontaue, the king Pierre, and that his brother ran off to the lost woods, in the movie, he will gain powers, etc. but not in the introduction, all I want there is Frontaue introduced, the king, his brother, and how he ran off, that the king has everything anyone could ever want, except an empty place in his heart (for true love, but that is not told yet) then talk about he rules justly very briefly and bingo, we are in the movie with the opening song.
Thanks,
Mark
Gosh um this is hard
Uggghhh Writer block
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WM:"WHOOSH WHOOSH"
CM:"Who Said that?"
WM:"PSST, Hey Kid look over there"
CM:"Huh what"
CM= Camoflage Man
WM= Whoosh man
Uh, don't write like you did at the begining of the post.
"Such being said, it should be assumed..."
"And it nonetheless did..."
"Now it should not be assumed yet,..."
Too much speech without substance gets on my nerves. Sounds like your teacher told you to write a five hundred word essay and you stretching it out for all it's worth.
SF, i think he wrote it that way just to be in the style of the Medeival language, which uses long words. Simply style.
Correct, digiteyeZ. I was trying to not only make the story be about medeival times, but also sound KINDA like it came from those times too, a story told by some ancient scrolls or something... ...But anywayz, anyone have any ideas for the opening (By the way, the movie script will not be written like that, that is simply the writing style for the story... ...the actual movie will be dialoge like in a Disney movie, for kids and adults.)
Thanks,
Mark
yeah, that's not real easy... maybe have some establishing shots of the town with the castle on the hill, and some horses and carriage trotting forward from the camera into town, with white subtitle: "Frontaue, France" i don't think you can easily say how Frontaue was separated from France (its history) with narration. it would be better to have some village people reading a newspaper out loud or something talking about the current situation.
actually, i'm thinking it would be better to reveal the story a little later; show what's happening 17 years later ("modern-day"), and have the Black Knight reveal his story to someone else (a woman he falls in love with?) Then while he narrates the past, you can show what's happening visually.
of course, i'm changing your script now, aren't i? you may not want it that way. sorry, i may not have been much help. 
but wait, you said this would be a Disney-type movie? so what you want is a narration like that trader-guy from Alladin. hmmmm... maybe i'll think of something later...
You know, moviedirector, you are off to a good start with what you have already written. I say just write and rewrite it a few times, and you'll have what you need. I think it will connect better with the rest of your script that way, too.
Your story sounds cool. Good luck.
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