Author Topic: bizzar ending MOSES POWERS
posted 01-31-2001 07:42 PM
Okay, i'm writing a story and I need a REALLY bizzar ending, like 6th Sense and Fight Club, but keep it seriously, not jokes.

Okay, the story goes like this: An Ex-Cop is hired by a Casino owner to find his ex-partner who the cops believe is killing a bunch of people. The thing is, he has to catch him soon because the bad guy REALLY hates this senator, and they believe that hes gonna assassinate him. Meanwhile, the bad guy forms a cult with some guys and the good guy has to gun 'em all down.

If you need any more details, e-mail me.

Bread_12
posted 02-01-2001 05:06 PM
How bout, by killing the bad guy, you also kill the senator. See, the bad guy could have planted explosives at a place where the senator is giving a speech. Then, the bad guy has a heart monitor attached to the detonator. So, if his heart stops, the bomb goes off. Therefore, when the bad guy dies, the senator dies. That simple. He was "planning" to die ya see.

Ok, maybe that doesn't make much sense.

My Two Bits,

Bread

multimedia light & magic
posted 02-01-2001 07:58 PM
get the bad guy to frame the good guy fo rmurder in the end.

maybe, the bad guy couldve kidnapped the senator, dressed him up, and when the fighting broke out, shoved him into the crossfire with a toy gun in his hand.

the bad guy wins.

E. Flask
posted 02-03-2001 11:51 PM
Here's an idea...

The senator in question was facing the revelation of a scandal that would have ended his career. He set the whole situation up, somehow-- he knew the bad guy hated him, and made sure that the bad guy would be gunning for him. The senator set the good guy up to gun the bad guy down in a blaze of glory so that he could earn the public's sympathy and no one would notice the scandal. It sounds pretty simplistic, but I think it would be very powerful, if handled right.

"We don't feel emotions; we do emotions." -- Anthony Robbins.

strawpaper
posted 02-04-2001 10:26 AM
Okay, the story COULD go like this:
An Ex-Cop is hired by a Casino owner(Who really is SATAN) to find his
ex-partner(who is really one of Satan's best/#1 diciples/demons) who the
cops believe is killing a bunch of people(he is cause that is what demons
do). The thing is, he has to catch him soon because the bad guy(the Satan
diciple demon) REALLY hates this senator(who is expected to take the
badguy/demon's place as Satan's #1 after becoming president in the future
and causing much mass distruction or other horrors), and they believe that
hes gonna assassinate him. Meanwhile, the bad guy forms a cult(that worships
him over Satan) with some guys and the good guy has to gun 'em all down.

Well, you said you wanted bizaare.

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Nayman
posted 02-04-2001 10:54 AM
perhaps, in the midst of a gun fight the good guy gets the bad guy right where he wants him and is about to hauyl him off to jail but...... the good guy gets a gun stuck in his mouth and his head blown off. TRhe abd guy escapes, and the movie ends with an ominous shot of the bad guy at the good giys funeral smiling, then getting into a limo and driving away

Magnus
posted 02-04-2001 06:23 PM
Expanding on E. Flask's scandal, the senator had an illegitamite child, and the bad guy is the senetor's son.

Or.... The senator is pulling a Bullworth and actually wanted to die, and therefore makes it harder for the good guy to win.

Or.... The ending scene has the good guy with a gun to the bad guy's head, but then it turns out that the good guy is actually part of the cult so he turns and shoots the senator.

Explain this whole cult thing, because why would a random bad guy have a cult following when he just wants to kill the senator?

Bread_12
posted 02-06-2001 02:42 PM
I've got it! The senator is kidnapped! The terrorist guy takes him to the zoo. But, before the hero can get there, the senator is thrown to a pack of gorillas in heat and brutally gang raped to death.

Nobody would ever expect that one.

My Two Bits,

Bread

MOSES POWERS
posted 02-07-2001 07:33 PM
Not so much a cult, but more like a gang, of followers. Disciples, if you will. This guy is kinda a famous seriel killer, like Hannibal Lecter, and all of the guys in the gang 'worship' him and all the stuff he does.

MOSES POWERS
posted 02-07-2001 07:35 PM
Not so much a cult, but more like a gang, of followers. Disciples, if you will. This guy is kinda a famous seriel killer, like Hannibal Lecter, and all of the guys in the gang 'worship' him and all the stuff he does.

SeerSavant
posted 02-12-2001 09:55 AM
The cult could be some apocalyptic type that believes the senator is the harbinger of some immense doom or whatever, the twist is that our good guy discovers the hitman is right, and in the end when the senator is thanking him for saving his life. (Let's say; this is the way the bad guy was going to kill the senator in the first place)
--The hero shakes the senators hand while wearing a ring with a barb tipped with poison, a scratch and the hero tells him, "who said the guy failed?"
--Another variation would be to make the two men (Killer and hero) twins, so in the end we aren't sure which one is dead, etc.
--Tell it all by flashback as our main guy is on a roof with a rifle.

Hope these help.

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Skinned Fox
posted 02-14-2001 10:16 AM
It sounds off topic but I'll reintegate.

Let me explain the "lead lemming" principal. The lemming at the front advances the suicide rush because he is afraid of getting trampled by the rushing lemmings behind him. The lemmings behind rush foward to keep up with thier laeder.

An old bit of hippy wisdom I read that explains how ideas, how movements, how leaders lose control.

You said in the first post that the killer was his ex-partner. While doing the legwork like any good private eye the hero identifies with the killer. Due to his past experiences his understanding of the killer's psychology is complete.

In the confrontation the lead flies, the flesh drops, the blood spills. The two ex partners are at a standoff and try to talk eachother into surrendering with some terse aggressive dailogue. Total psychic warfare.

The killer in order to maintain a cadre of willing, loyal followers must have a philosophy that fulfills some profound emptyness within them. Remember Tylers "Our Great Depression" speech.

THe hero end runs him psychologically causing the villan to commit suicide. That or better still leaves him speechless, stuttering, livid, shaken nad most of all distracted. This gives the hero the chance to kill him in a spectacularly gruesome way.

The cult, bloodthirsty and longing is impressed. Those that fled when thier leader died trickle in and in a series of events similar to the ones discovered by the hero during the killers tracking he is led down the same path his former partner took.

You can end the story as he's rushing toward the edge.

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