Author Topic: Just the outline of a plot Actor
posted 02-04-2001 04:07 AM
GEEK asks PROM QUEEN for a date. Of course she turns him down. Whole school gets a big laugh about it. QUEEN's JOCK boy friend beats GEEK up.

Then there is a school bus accident. GEEK and QUEEN get clear. Everyone else dies.

Suddenly no one except GEEK will speak to PROM QUEEN. He again asks her for a date. She can't believe it when she hears herself accept. The next thing they are going everywhere together. She is miserable because she still can't stand the guy but some unknown force drives her to accept any suggestion he makes. Soon they are going steady, even having sex.

One day QUEEN asks GEEK why he is the only one that will speak to her.

GEEK
You don't know?

QUEEN
Know what?

GEEK
About the school bus accident.

QUEEN
The one where you and I were the only survivors?

GEEK
We were not the only survivors. We were the only fatalities. We're both dead. Now I'm in heaven. You're in hell.

Felix
posted 02-04-2001 04:56 AM
Oh-ho-ho!!! That's great!! I wish I had come up with something like that, I think you should definatly use a twist like that!! What is it for?

How'd you come up with that?

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Nayman
posted 02-04-2001 10:50 AM
not too bad!

only problem is it sounds like an episode of "are you afriad of the dark?" that i saw

oh well, really good stuff

Actor
posted 02-04-2001 10:48 PM
quote:

What is it for?

Nothing at the moment. Right now I'm working on an entirely different project that I'm devoting all me attention to.
quote:

How'd you come up with that?

I've thought of someday doing a script based on my high school days. There was a saying going around then that went something like "When he/she dies I hope he/she goes to hell and the devil makes him/her f*** (fill in the blank) every day for all eternity." Fill in the blank was usually the bride of Frankenstein or Richard Nixon or something considered equally awful.

quote:

it sounds like an episode of "are you afriad of the dark?" that i saw

I've never seen "are you afraid of the dark?"

E. Flask
posted 02-10-2001 12:03 PM
Man, that is really, really, twisted. I am very impressed. It would make a great short film as is, or you could expand it to include the geek and a whole busful of his tormentors.

I have one very picky suggestion-- Feel free to ignore it. A guy who consciously enjoys the fact that the prom queen is doomed to keep company with him is probably not a good candidate for heaven. You could have the geek remain blissfully unaware of the prom queen's being "forced" to be with him. Perhaps the soul of their nasty teacher/principal/whatever appears at some point to tell her of her horrible fate.

It's a great idea, no matter what.

"A drop of honey accomplishes more than a gallon of gall." -- Abraham Lincoln.

Actor
posted 02-11-2001 02:24 AM
E. Flask--You're right of course. In order for the geek to really be in heaven he's got to believe that she really loves him. Otherwise it's not really heaven. Some other character needs to tell her the bad news.

Felix
posted 02-11-2001 02:43 AM
How about the devil himself?
In his red horned, pitch fork form on in the form of another.

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Skinned Fox
posted 02-11-2001 04:28 AM
Not necessarily. If people do anything right it's the subtle art of self delusion. Some people are just that shallow. Some people need a deeply fulfilling soul quenching relationship, some just need some chick on their arm. All for the nookie, you know.

PQ: No, it's just a lie. I don't love you. I'm not your girlfriend.

Gk: Sorry but your mine in every sense of the word. *snaps fingers*

PQ: Your right, sorry. *embraces him*

Ferna
posted 02-12-2001 06:33 PM
I agree, it sounds like an episode of Are You Afraid of the Dark?

Plus, you'd definitly give it away buy not having anyone talking to the girl but the girl. I mean, you've seen Sixth Sense, haven't you?

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