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Topic: Help on script...
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moviedirector
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posted 03-12-2001 10:42 PM
Hi, I have a problem with writing my script. There are many elements to the story, but I would like someone to develope the main part of this with me. The main part is this--- a guy is on a train, he has a watch that reminds the old lady sitting next to him of her friend Joseph Taret. She tells him the story (the part of the old woman and the man on the busses meeting I can take care off--as well as the ending) but the majority of the movie, is the old woman telling of Joseph's life. He was born a month premature and his eyes had not developed so he was blind. His mother refuses to let this stop his dreams. We go from when he was born to him in junior high school. We show scenes of him wishing to play sports etc. and cannot; we show his first crush play cruel jokes with him like saying she will go out with him but not. All played up really emotional. I want to spend a great amount of time here, to really develope his character. Now we move to him in high school. Through a chance meeting, he hears a violin in the school orchestra and wishes to play. He is told he cannot, but his mother buys him the violin and cuts the school board a deal to get her son in the orchestra. He tries to play, and becomes okay. We show him just at school, he gets picked on, and a girl stands up for him, she invites him over to help him clean himself up (his mother will be upset and make a scene if he got beat up). He begins to really like the girl, and her him. So thus a love intrest is born. The band teacher does not like him because he is behind the other students, but none-the-less he keeps him because of his mother's deal. When the girl he likes is made fun of for hanging out with him by school bullies, he is outraged, and tries to defend her by fighting. He is called in for fighting, and the band teacher tries successfully to use this as an excuse to get him out of band. His mother is upset, but cannot change the descision. He goes back to school, but not the same. His mother suprises him with a tutor to teach him band at his own house. He is taught and becomes very good (during this, the love intrest and school life subplots should be played up). He is so good, that an invitation is given to fulfill one of his greatest dreams (that he had told to his girlfriend) of playing at Carnagie hall. He accepts the challenge and goes to play. His band teacher goes as well, not knowing that the boy is playing, but goes as a "Night on the town" for the christmas concert. They play (subplots needed here!) and do wonderfull! The band teacher notices the boy aftewards and walks up to congradulate him, but the boy simply walks away (character flaw possibly.) After this, we try to wrap up quickly, we morph him into an old man and show his house filled with acheivements. He sits on his couch and coughs his wife brings him medicine. Pillow talk here. BAM back to train for the ending that actually makes the sappy story above really compelling. So what do I have, basically a blind forrest gump, but that's okay. I can do the end and the begginging of the story, but the part which I described above, I don't really want/can do. I need someone else to write it for me, not just colaborate and give me ideas, but really write it. I know that is a large task (seeing as how that part of the movie should last approx. one and a half hours--longer is fine  ) But I really need this help. If you are interested, please let me know by either replying or sending an e-mail to: BlueWaterProd@Aol.Com Thanks,
Mark 
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